Rate my rap….oxygen?
i reserect the intellect of mackaveli like lazerous
causing damages fast, i attack haphazardus
battle this, i swing a combat ax to crack your cranium
debraining um, asylem patient with insane visions of blood
dripping, choas flipping, playing backwards through the static
the mathamatic entity of sixteen that brings the asmatic
sezure feel the freedom from the lack of breathing
slip into a coma while you life force’s depleating
beyond reason, the origin of setient life
bent on the destruction of the gentelman type
set phasers to stun, your done when i shoot the laser
i don’t spit bars, i spit stars and quasars
a breath of solar bodies, gaxaies at my command
a universe of aliens rampage in my hand
numerous like the cosmic sands, expanded between galaxies
containing human make up that i shake up using gravity
the apthy that shown to the creation of breath
is that it is it’s ironic fate that it should end in death
block the shit, its lace with a toxin
and lock in my spit, the fresh breath like oxygen
i spit oxygen from my throat in the form of dope
make you explode like an overdoes of poprocks and coke
block off your veins, stopping blood flow to your brain
robbing vitamins heightening the feeling make you writhle in pain
simple to explain, when i stop spiting your cut off from life
thrown in space, in a cacoon in cased, a mummy of a different type
a dead husk shattering into red dust on impact
with my verbal satalite scattering light like defract
focused unseen, a beem controlled by dark arts
i realse all thoughts and unleash black magic on the hard hearts
in all forms of spoken word bards hark my coming
the one that will mend the broken world, repentance from the way its running
the destroyer of every hinderance in my path, every obsticle
unstopable the forgein conquiror of the immpossible
the one who will speak so that the visionaries listen
i make the insision that frees oxygen from its prison
thats the mission, to leave you breathless
well its acomplished with 36 stabs to the cheast bitch
i relize it needs better flow but rate it and give me your input
the chours is right there
and not every song needs a chours, stop conforming to mainstream
It’s very good lyrically, but I don’t like it. I just never got into the style of "killing people with your awesome lyrics". If you know what I mean. 9/10, but it’s not my style
November 30th, 2009 at 3:55 pm
Yeah thats pretty good but I rather hear it over a beat.
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November 30th, 2009 at 4:23 pm
0 where is the chorus. and it makes no sense whatsoever.
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November 30th, 2009 at 4:50 pm
Nice
7/10
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November 30th, 2009 at 5:30 pm
It’s very good lyrically, but I don’t like it. I just never got into the style of "killing people with your awesome lyrics". If you know what I mean. 9/10, but it’s not my style
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November 30th, 2009 at 5:45 pm
Wow, this one is "TOTALLY" different and from a completely different "place" than the others I’ve read from you.
It’s good as far as lyrically, I’d give it a solid 8.5/10. My only problem is that I’m not into gangsta or "violent" rap and it was "way" past my means.
It’s good, please don’t misunderstand me, it’s deep and dark and scary….but it’s too "there" for me. Much better than your others lyrically. I don’t think you needed any improvements.
Peace, Love & Happiness
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November 30th, 2009 at 6:21 pm
You bring it with no frills!
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November 30th, 2009 at 6:34 pm
ok that was pretty dope man, 7-8/10
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November 30th, 2009 at 7:20 pm
garbage kid stop it
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