Are these poems good?
i wrote these poems a while ago, and i entered them in young authors for my school. I won as the state representative, but i never thought that they were that great. What do you think???
Once upon a time…
Once upon a t i m e…
Not now, never been,
Never could,
never e n d.
A day wasted,
Running ‘till then.
Gone today, back again
Never remember,
Never k n o w n.
Could have been
Couldn’t be
Never w a s.
Always will be,
Always e n d i n g.
‘till tomorrow’s t o d a y and today’s y e s t e r d a y.
Once again;
It has n e v e r been…
Remembering a time once upon us,
But it is merely a figment of the imagination.
You can recall times before life of you own,
With just one though, you remember,
Finding now that it never was…
It is elapsed now, never was;
Was it, or was it not?
Remembering, or solely a thought?
Today’s tomorrow is always a day next and yesterday’s today…
One day before wave, tides of crashing shores too early,
Over time…
Once upon a time…
If only…
If only you had said something,
Who knows where we would be now?
If only I had asked the questions I had longed to,
If I had spoken…
Now you regret it, for it is much too late now.
You must wait until time is right,
When the wind shifts and the moon shadows
Maybe then it will be…
But for now, you have lost your chance, too mad at your coward soul.
Yet you know deep in you wish for b r a v e r y…
If only…
Regret
Day by day, I ponder what it would be like.
I know only live to regret the day
T h a t I m e t y o u.
How it has brought such sorrow and despair!-
And though time how it has stained my soul deep within.
How I regret that faithful morning that I found myself in its predicament!-
And how it now complicates the time we have spent apart.
Now I only wish that, in time, you come to understand,
But perhaps, it too, could have been avoided.
How I regret the days in which I was blind from the world on which I stand!
How I feel I make this troubled soul ache as it is torn,
But, I can only now say,
It is my truest…
My deepest…
Regret…
Unseen
They say the best things in life are unseen,
Which is why we close our eyes when we
K i s s,
C r y,
And d r e a m
A kiss-
A time we share with those we love,
A first,
A second,
A third,
All the same passion…
The best things in life-
Eyes closed…
Unseen…
A cry-
Impossible for eyes to be open.
A time to let emotions free from the iron bars of deep.
The best things in life…
Unseen…
A dream-
Sometimes good, sometimes bad.
Always relaxing,
But never understood.
Your eyes always closed, pleasantness arises…
The best things in life…
Unseen…
Time…
What is time?
Nothing but a limiting factor of presence,
A pressure to leave the ones we love,
A schedule impossible to keep.
Something that is different for every clock, An annoying time of leave,
Something that shall not exist if not for the greediness of this horrid world!
Time…
A Best Friend
Best friends forever, boys are whatever,
Together forever, never been better.
One secret, no lies, a sorrowful cry,
A laugh…
A sob…
A whisper…
A sigh…
Bringing out the best, fight through the rest.
A smile to share with someone who cares, with a shoulder to lean on and one to lend.
Always be there, never end.
Together at last and forever.
A best friend, boys are whatever,
A world with no secrets or lies, and the freedom to c r y…
A best friend…
Footsteps
“Mommy, I want to follow in your footsteps,”
wherever you go, I want to follow…
Follow the footsteps…
Through the beach,
Treading through snow,
Across the road…
A first step, the biggest,
Following the path.
Always a follower, never a leader;
Until the day your follower materializes. But until then…
Follow the footsteps through a path unpaved.
Follow the footsteps for a path unknown.
Follow the footsteps…
Haze
With rage I cry out!
I can not comprehend the world on which I stand upon!
The world is a h a z e, only a fog!
Can this not be a dream? – More so a nightmare…
Oh! Break h a z e with some foreign light!
But it does not clear, for it is defended.
I fear it may never be shattered, this h a z e!
Then what will become…?
Burning
Streams flow fast full of salty tears…
The burning will not stop! – it’s suffocating!
For the same operate will occur again as it has before, yet, I can not stop.
It seems imprudent to have this burning,
Oh! With the lakes before me you would think it would cease!
Please, I beg of you, sojourn this burning!
thanks <3 commets appreciated!
If only, Unseen, Time and Best friend were excellent 5*****stars definately but the others were nt that great, but they were definately going somewhere
January 31st, 2010 at 5:09 pm
There is no such thing as bad poetry =)
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January 31st, 2010 at 5:59 pm
If only, Unseen, Time and Best friend were excellent 5*****stars definately but the others were nt that great, but they were definately going somewhere
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